North Italy (student)

Ohmygosh. I feel so horrible for asking this. You know what you're doing now, but will you please expand on your sentences? I don't think I can accept someone with short sentences like that...

I feel really horrible for saying that. OTL

But if you don't know what I mean, look at the accepted appliactions. A perfect example of this would be Arthur Kirkland's application which you can find in 'Students'. Please go have a look and you'll understand what I mean, ok? You can come back to this application and edit it. And include a hometown for Italy. Like Venice or Rome.

(I must be really pissing you off now, huh.)

Also, read over your RP sample. You need to change things such as 'new' which should have been 'knew'. You also switch tenses halfway through. Please beta your work.

yea sorry i forgot to fix that one up ^^; no problem at all :)

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Still not enough. Do you want me to make you a list so you can understand easier? Ok:

1 - Give him a Hometown from Italy.
2 - Give details about his personality. Two paragraphs minimum.
3 - Biology. Make sure it matches that of the other vampires (Or...vampire, in this case. The only other vampire is Arthur Kirkland and he's got a different biology to you)
4 - Personality and habits, expand and give details. Two paragraphs minimum.
5 - History. Make sure it matches with Lovino's, who is a teacher. Two paragraphs minimum.
6 - Your grammar isn't as great as I'd prefer. It's passable. But try to make it intersting. But, I must say, I really like how you portray Feli. Very true to the character.

I'm bein' stern here! Because... Because I have high expectations. I'm, like... OHMAHGAWD, I'M YOUNGER THAN YOU. Sorry, i just realised that I'm a year younger than you are, and I'm telling you off or something to that extent. I'm, like, a year above the rest of my English class, doing what the year above should be doing. So... Yeah. :/

Hope you don't take offence or something~

(P.S. Sorry about the paragraph minimum thing. I hate those too... But in applications which state paragraph minimums, I find, helps me to force out more stuff and create a generally better application.)

(P.P.S. I can't have this character on reserve forever, I should put a time-limit on it. 8U If someone else wants this character, you can't babysit all the time. This was originally posted on the 30th of december, I believe, so a week later is the 4... OHGEEZ. OK. YOU HAVE, LIKE, A DAY TO FIX UP YOUR APPLICATION TO PERFECTION. If you want to make sure it's perfect in this time, study other people's applications. It helped with me, so much.)

You didn't meet the deadline... Nor did you redo your application in the extra time I supplied after the deadline... So this is going into the denied folder.